User blog comment:Nobody700/What If: Alien invasion arc part 7/@comment-3045030-20160113011748

Typos:

1. "heard a road" (roar)

2. "YOU WHO KILL MY FRIEND" ("KILLS MY FRIENDS" or just "FRIENDS"/"KILLED"?)

3. "Lightening Max" (Lightning)

4. "Then, she caused her best trick" (i'm assuming you mean "used"... but she is an esper, so it's a little ok if you didn't)

5. "He might barely able to move" (barely be able to move... or better yet: might be barely able to move)

Commentary:


 * So Mysticism is another Soul King hand? like Pernida or Mimihagi? how many does he have? (Bleach refrence)


 * If only Pluton ate Mushroom instead of Monocross, quite the trip.


 * I know that he was considered to be S-Class in fighting ability by Shicchi, but the fact is: it took 3 of Atomic Samurai's disciples to beat 1 Demon Level Threat (and not without hit giving them quite a fight), and Shicchi could be wrong (the only way to be S-Class is to beat a Demon Level Threat, and even Puri-Puri was beaten by pre-rain Sea King)... (well you did say "was aware", you sure you didn't mean thought?)


 * Tanktop Girl bit him? Meow.


 * Watchdog-man tackled the entity? i thought he was more of a scratching kinda guy (also you sure made alot of tackling in this chapter)


 * "Somehow i'm not S Class... but the furry is", you wanna fight "the furry" and find out why?


 * Buzzsaws... saws... sounds familiar with him, but it does take quite a bit of body manipulation/shapeshifting


 * Because he was awful?, i'm pretty ok with that, but we sure the entire battle wasn't awful?


 * Threw a plane at him? that's her BEST trick? (well it's trick, not move... still bothers me though)


 * "Wait, you can do that"? she didn't know?