User blog comment:Nobody700/What If: Alien Invasion arc part 8/@comment-3045030-20160114041433

Typos:

1. "Too think" (to think)

2. "I doubt even the might Tornado of Terror" ("mighty"/"might of")

3. "Let us end our greatest enemy's" (enemy/enemies)

4. "Show the world why they fear us" ("they should fear us"... unless you changed the story completely)

5. "and when the previous ruler of the universe." ("when fighting the previous ruler")

Commentary:


 * Don't make Boros use your words, let him speak for himself.


 * There is no guarantee Black Sperms fused modes are actually fast (people/beings can be strong without being equally fast).


 * So now, not only does Genos have a blinding attack (Anime's revision, i know), but now so does Boros?... Since when did everyone turn into Trunks?


 * Kilometer, Miles... you just can't decide can ya?


 * E.N.W is violet? interesting (that actually does sound kinda nice).


 * blood curl in fear? fear?... couldn't you use something with excitement? this might give people the wrong idea.


 * "To think, real opponents, he thought he lost them."? that just... sounds wrong (the way it's written, not the idea itself)... and it might be more than just that sentence.


 * Merged Black Sperm usually seems like agitated, more confident (and collective?)... i suppose that's because of his high power level, Good Job (not sarcasm, i mean it, Well Done... btw this can also kinda go with my second comment).


 * Heaven, that's nice, but the concept is a bit... earthly (is paradise ok for you?)


 * "au Revior"? so he knows french? (by the way: why is the "R" uppercase, and the "a" Lowercase?)


 * Bigger than ever? If he could do that, why not when fighting the heroes, when Saitama hit him, or something else (not to mention he reacts to negative emotions and hostility, Boros was really that hostile? / was he really that sentient? well he was primal, but i guess something had to make him a part of the Monster Association, stay and not attack any of them... i guess?)


 * "over his corpse", whose? (you just wrote about Evil Natural Water, but the only corpses there are of someone elses of the Monster Association)


 * Alien V.S Stalker 3, Haunt of the Hunters(\Haunting Hunters).